WRITING OBSTACLE

Tell the reader something important about a character by describing only their hands.

No Title, Prologue To My Story

Prologue:

You couldn’t see it in his eyes or in his face but his hands told their story. He had just killed someone. He stood there still with blood on his hands and an expressionless face.


Jamie had just got back from school. That day was the worst and the last day of her life. In the morning she had got ready as usual in her grand but boring house. She was an only child with two very wealthy parents. But her parents never understood her and she felt alone in the world.


She was very much a beauty. She had dark black locks of curls that ran down all the way to her butt and beautiful carmel skin with dark brown eyes that shimmered like gold in the sunlight. Her beauty was the reason why her boyfriend was the most popular boy in school. She also was friends with all the popular, rich kids in school.


For that many thought she was lucky. Including the boy that caused her death. However despite her wealth, beauty, and popularity she hated her life. Her boyfriend was a total douche and her friends were so fake and petty. Her family was falling apart, because her dad had an affair and her mom married mostly for wealth.


Slowly she grew more distant from her friends, boyfriend and her parents. However nobody seemed to notice.


Now this morning she felt a sick throb in her stomach as she thought about going to school. Thought about pretending again that she had any interest in the drama her group had to spill. Pretending when her boyfriend kissed her that she didn’t feel revolted. She had wanted to break up with her boyfriend for a long time but she was just to nervous to.


The though had made her feel so awful like a weight was drawing her down. Jamie felt it was just too much to handle. So she didn’t go to school. Instead she went to meet up with the mysterious guy named Adam she had been texting.


A week ago someone with the wrong number had texted her “I don’t want to be with you anymore after what you did to me” there was no more to the text and she had been so confused. Then they talked it over and apparently he was heartbroken from his girlfriend cheating on him. She felt bad for him and they started chatting a lot.


Turns out they had a lot in common. They both had parents with issues and they both had experience with bad relationships. She started getting butterflies every time they talked and even know she knew it was wrong she started to like him.


Now she was going to meet him in real life.

They were to meet up at his house. Being a naive teenager, she didn’t thing much about the danger in meeting a total stranger in his house.


When she arrived at his house it was a shabby run down apartment in the bad part of town. Jamie pushed it aside and nocked on the door of the stranger. Right away she could hear him coming towards the door.


“ Hey, Jamie great to finally meet you” he smirked.


He was tall about 6’2 and he was very muscular. Wow she thought he is hot. He had fair skin, dark grayish blue eyes and fluffy blonde hair. She thought to herself that maybe he was the one for her, and that were destined to be together. Yes she was easily fooled but after all she was only 15 and he was 18.


“Hi Adam, nice to meet you too” she blushed and waited for him to invite her in.


She thought he looked familiar,but couldn’t remember where she had seen him before. When they got inside they sat down on his ragged red couch and they started to talk.



They were actually a lot alike, Jamie thought.

He liked playing video games like Call of Duty, Fortnight, and more. She also liked playing video games. She liked going on long walks and bike rides, and he liked going on runs and skateboarding. She did volleyball and swimming and he did swimming and basketball.


After about 30 minutes of talking Adam kissed her. She kissed him back and then they started to make out.

He then started to touch her all over and take off her shirt. She pushed him off her and he looked confused and then again moved on to her.


“No, stop”, she yelled and felt a rush of embarrassment. He kissed her again and when she pulled away he stopped.


“What’s your fucking problem girl, am I not good enough for you and your little rich ass”, he yelled and she started to tense up feeling a rush of adrenaline through her.


“No, no I just I’m not ready, really it’s nothing to do with you”.


“Oh so it’s about your fucking dumb ass boyfriend Tyler, that treats you like crap”, he’s voice got louder and more fierce.


“But your willing to give him love, cause he is rich like you”.


“Are you a stalker or something, how do you even know about my boyfriend or that dumb rumor” Jamie screamed.


Yes part of the reason she didn’t want to make love to him was because of her boyfriend. But he was also wrong because she never did make love to her boyfriend; it was just a dumb rumor that someone started.Jamie thought that Tyler probably started the rumor, because it started right after Jamie said no to having sex with him, on homecoming night.


“You don’t remember me, miss perfect Jamie who’s dating your perfect popular boyfriend in East Brook Highschool”, suddenly she remembered that he went to her school and that she’d seen him a few times in the school hallways.


“I go to your school, remember.”


“But you never mentioned that you knew me. That whole time that we texted you acted like you had no idea who I was.”


Anger was rushing through her and she could tell he was angry too. She thought that maybe she should shut up but she didn’t care or listen.


“How did you even get my number, are you stocking me”. At that he slapped her hard across the face.

She was stunned for a little and then she walked speedily towards the door screaming that she was gonna tell everyone that he was a psycho stalker.

He ran towards her pushing her against the wall and then out of rage Adam slapped her again.

“Don’t you dare, you stupid bitch your just like my mother, a whore.”


After he said that she hit him back and tried to loosen from his grip. Shocked and angry he garnered the nearest thing to him, a wrench, that was sitting in a shoe rack right next to him. Letting his anger get to him he smashed it in to her head over and over again. She screamed tried to getting away from him, but he too strong. Adam kept smashing the wrench into her head until her screams were over.


Now she was just sobbing silently. Then he stopped and realized what he had done. Her face that was once beautiful was now smashed in and blood was dripping down from it.


He didn’t want to kill her, but he knew if he didn’t, then he would be in trouble. So he strangled her until her eyes rolled back and her body went limp. Then letting go over her, he watched her body fall to the floor.


Then he cried for the first time since his dog died when he was 9. He knew what he had done was wrong, but he felt that she had deserved it for being such a bitch to him. So he sat there for an hour still in thought. Thinking about how he had got her number and made up the whole thing about his ex girlfriend. He just wanted to be with her, what’s so wrong with that.

Then he figured out what to do with the body.


I’m hoping to write a whole novel and post a chapter every week but only if anyone wants me too. Feel free to give me any feedback you have because this is just a draft of what I want to eventually publish as a novel.

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