POEM STARTER
‘Deep breaths take up far more space than silence.’
Write a poem based on, or including, this line.
Just My Luck
Deep breaths take up far more space than silence
I can feel you taking all of my breath
I’m gasping on all the air that’s left
And you sit there menacing
Never thought you’d be so cold
Who would have pegged you as uncaring
And your laughter boarders on insanity
As you revel in the joy of all you’ve done to me
I’m in disbelief
You bank on the pain cause it fills up your cup
And even after all that I’ve done I could never measure up
Just my luck
I love the subtle rhythm of this, the loose rhymes and word choice. It's simple but effective, and especially the final verse with "you bank on the pain cause it fills up your cup" resonates with things I've felt thinking about an abuser before.
You've reminded me of why I enjoyed well-written free form poetry in the past. Thank you ♥
No, thank you!
This is very beautiful, keep writing, you’ve got a very poetic soul
Thank you so much
