STORY STARTER
Submitted by Celaid Degante
Leaving
Write about a character leaving something, or someone, they love.
I remember this part…
I remember this part
I remember when we were sitting here,
When you got up and I stayed.
I remember you leaving, you always left.
And I stayed here, in our spot.
I remember you said something to me, as you left.
Some broken words about how it wasn’t what I thought it was.
But how can I understand these things when your back is turned to me.
When I have to watch you leave. Again.
I once said that loving is staying,
And I have stayed for a while now.
And it’s not that I don’t love you anymore,
Because I do.
But I can’t stay here any more.
I’ve stayed long enough for the both of us.
I remember this part.
I remember it last time and the time before that.
I remember it so much that I don’t think it hurts as bad,
Watching you leave me again this time.
The line “When I have to watch you leave. Again.” is very powerful. I read “again” is if it was italicizes, idk if that was what you were going for or not, but I felt it worked with the piece. The character isn’t arguing or complaining per-say but they are wanting their feelings a voice to be heard and validated. Love it!
“I’ve stayed long enough for the both of us” was definitely a hard hitting line, I love the ending and I love the story you told in the poem, very beautiful