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Write a scene where a character quits, or is fired from, their job.

This could be based off real experience, or entirely made up. Think about why they have to leave, and the ramifications of doing so.

Fired

Drama

Humour

Emma rushed in to this old pizza shop one minuet late after her shift her manager started yelling at her he pulled the apron of her and slammed it on the ground “you’re fired get out.” He pointed at the door she slumped down and left how could she get fired she was a minuet late she wondered and would wonder if she would ever know the awnser

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Evanisha

5 months ago

I don’t think it’s bad, but there is a lot of grammatical errors. You spelt minute minuet, which is a form of music. Answers is spelled awnser. Try to cut the sentences a little shorter, because there is some run ons. Additionally, there is no commas in places that should have them.

Overall, I think it has potential but with corrections/revisions, it can become a lot better. I think you could also explain the situation more, like make it slower and more flowing.

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