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Write a Petrarchan Sonnet on the theme of Autumn.

A Petrarchan Sonnet has 14 lines; the first 8 must have a rhyme scheme ABBAABBA, the last 6 can have variable rhymes, but are normally split into 2 sets of 3 lines.

Great-Fall

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Fingerlings’ tips fissure and rust,

Their ageing grip grows weak,

Riots of russet flutter and streak

Earthbound, crumpling to dust.

Suspended in air, a sulphur must,

The bang of gunpowder and its reek,

Dyeing nightskies into Javan batik,

Swilled and rolled by November gust.

But she of blanching breath and bite

Births sunspots in redemptive sigh:

Imbued with scent of honey-sweet spice,

Fire-warmed corners in candlelight

And cinnamon dusting pumpkin pie,

A joyous shudder with every slice!

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Brakes

2 years ago

This is delightful — I love the periodic alliteration, the hyper-specificity, and now I want some pie! Following you for more terrific poetry!

AI Writing Editor

2 years ago

This poem has a strong sense of imagery and paints a vivid, beautiful picture of Autumn. The Petrarchan Sonnet form is utilized well, with a clear rhyme scheme that helps to enhance the poem's flow.

To further strengthen the poem, consider honing in on one specific image or aspect of autumn that you can explore in greater detail. Doing so would give your poem more focus and repeated imagery could make it more engaging for readers.

Additionally, consider adding another layer of complexity to your language and narrative structure. An effective way to do this would be to make use of personification, metaphor, and other literary devices. This could help emphasize the mood of the poem and provide more nuance to it.

Finally, you could work on tying up your poem's theme in the last two lines more effectively. For example, you could explore how pumpkin pie is a symbol of autumn and why this brings you joy.

Overall, this is an impressive attempt at utilizing a Petrarchan Sonnet form and creating a captivating poem about autumn.

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