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On your shift as a zookeeper, you notice an animal is missing from their enclosure...
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Oh No
Most days at my job are uneventful, just feeding the animals and making sure they were healthy. But one morning, something went wrong.
Walking though the snake enclosure I noticed that the boa constrictor was not in his cage where he was supposed to be. With no cleanings on the schedule, this was very bad.
I immediately reported it to the office while checking to make sure the other snakes were still locked away. Thankfully they were.
Shortly, men in armor, carrying nets and tranquilizer guns arrived at the scene, and soon began to spread out and search for our missing snake.
I tagged along with one of them, wanting to see this all the way through. Soon enough, we heard screaming coming from the bird sanctuary. It probably wasn’t smart to put it next to the snake enclosure.
When we arrive at the scene, we see a crowd of people standing in front of one of the displays, looking at our snake swallow a bird whole!
The man I was with called all of his co workers over, and they tranquilized the boa before bagging him up. Sad that the show was over, the crowd left to go to other attractions, and we were left with a tranquilized snake that had a bird shaped upper body.
What a day!
What a day is right for your character!! Good job👍🌼💛
As soon as I read the prompt I thought, “Oh no!” So when I saw your title, I knew this would be good. I was not disappointed. You’ve got some great Show Don’t Tell moments “men in armor, carrying nets and tranquilizer guns…” And I feel you have space for that in a few other places like describing what the boa looked like (colors, size) or even the bird (or the feathers lying on the floor…) My other note is that I think you may have switched tenses 😅 You go from “I immediately reported it…” to later “When we arrive at the scene…”
You ended the story perfectly- my thought was “Wow what a rollercoaster this person must have had!” And then I saw you wrote “What a day!” so we’re in agreement :) Awesome job! Super entertaining.
“This was very bad” is an understatement! This was an interesting read!